Delicate as a soft feather,
silvery dew of of the moon's tears
floating ever so delicately
silently upon the moon-lit night.
It lands,
blossoming into a rose,
and bringing all of heaven's warmth,
to one,the rose swiftly turns
into the silvery feather
and blows away.
awayaway
away.
Look! How the feather
flutters and floats,
swinging and laughing and flying
effortlessly as its previous whole.
Look! How the silver sheenchanges
to orange as the setting sun,
to beauty, to grace, to allureof pearls and blossoms
where all are seen as equalsto forever and eternity.
So sweetly it flies,
it brushes upon the world,
to blossom,
bringing color,
bringing joy,
bringing life, vitality, sweetness,
that dewy and rich sweetness of life,
to the world.


I'd say that your poem is filled with descriptive words. It casts a "heaven like" imagery into a reader's eyes which is good. Good job :)
ReplyDeleteI could tell that you put a lot of effort in posting this poem! Imagery was great and I really like how you displayed your poem with the pictures!
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you employed imagery to a subject that's hard to describe with words. This poem is really deep and it really gets the reader thinking about what love truly is.
ReplyDelete-Suzanne L
Wow, beautiful descriptions :)I liked how you capitalized and colored the word "LOOK", very creative and different from the other ones I've read.
ReplyDelete-Sunmi P.
wow, this poem is real eye candy, I can tell a lot of work way put into it. I love the pictures, they really help the poem. Overall awesome job, love the colours and the composition.
ReplyDeleteThis verges on being like concrete poetry as it looks almost collage-like. I enjoyed seeing you play with arrangement of word and repetition. This was done effectively. Continue to write reflectively and creatively like this as it makes for interesting reading
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